Victoria’s Coma

Victoria’s Coma

by Blake X Poole

Victoria is now 15 years old. She is multi-racial because her mother was white and her dad is half Black, half Chinese. When Victoria was 6 years old, her dad got drunk and was driving, and they got into a car crash. Her mother got seriously injured in the car crash and became paralyzed. Her father got into serious trouble and he was sentenced to jail for fifteen years. Her mother wasn’t able to take care of her because she was confined to a wheelchair so she went to live with her aunt who was physically and verbally abusive towards her.

Victoria’s aunt would say disgusting things to her like, “You are a stupid, ugly, disgusting rat and that’s why no one likes you.” Victoria’s feelings would get hurt and she goes to bed every night sobbing. Victoria’s aunt would kick Victoria down the stairs, she would treat Victoria like she is a dog by putting a leash on her and forcing her to eat food off the ground, and Victoria’s aunt will scratch her face up. When Victoria goes to school, her teachers would wonder why she always has bruises on her face and Victoria would always lie to them and say that she keeps falling on the floor and hurting herself.

One day, Victoria missed her curfew and her aunt went searching for her throughout the neighbourhood. Victoria was with her friends at the park playing around and they were going to get something to eat. As Victoria walked with her friends to the store, before she even set foot in the store, her aunt grabbed her by her hair and threw Victoria into the trunk. Her friends were too scared to say anything, so they ran away. When they got back home Victoria got her phone taken away from her and then her aunt grabbed her by her shirt and took Victoria inside of the basement. Her aunt proceeded to shove her down the stairs and Victoria fell to the ground of the basement. Then her aunt locked the door to the basement so that Victoria couldn’t get out. Victoria layed down on the floor cold, bruised, hungry, and thirsty.

Victoria sobbed and said, “Why does she treat me like this? Why does she hate me?”

Victoria laid down on the ground for two hours and fell asleep. When she woke back up, she decided she had enough of being abused

by her aunt. She walked upstairs to the door but it was locked. She tried to break the door open, but the door wouldn’t budge. She walked back downstairs and searched the basement for items but there was nothing but dust, spiders, and rats crawling on the brick wall. Victoria got tired of searching through the basement so she decided to rest and go to sleep for the rest of the night.

The next morning, Victoria woke up and felt really weak because she hadn’t eaten anything in 24 hours. She started to smell like rotten eggs and moldy cheese because she hadn’t showered in 24 hours. She went to look around the basement one more time and in the back corner of the basement, she noticed a trapdoor. She walked towards the trapdoor and opened it. What she saw in the trapdoor was a crowbar, so she took the crowbar out and she ran upstairs to break the door open. She attempted to open the door but it still wouldn’t budge. She kept trying and trying to open the door and she ended up breaking the door and the door fell down with a big thud. Her aunt was not at the house so she went upstairs to find her phone and when she did she called the police and she told them everything her aunt had done to her.

As soon as Victoria’s aunt returned to the house, the scene was flooded with police officers and her aunt started to freak out. The police placed her aunt under arrest. Her aunt got charged with child neglect and assault and got sent to jail. Victoria was sent to a foster home because her mother was still unable to take care of her. Victoria missed her mom and dad and she suffered from separation anxiety and depression.

After she graduated from elementary school and went to middle school, Victoria started making poor choices. She started to skip school, making the wrong friends, and not going home when she was supposed to. Her grades started to drop drastically and she got held back in sixth grade. Victoria started acting up in her classes and was always getting into fights and stealing from her teachers. She was considered a danger to her classmates and got expelled from three different schools. Victoria’s foster mother and father tried disciplining Victoria but they couldn’t because she was an out of control teen. Victoria would always go out with her friends to parties and she would drink a lot of alcoholic drinks. Then one day, Victoria and her friends, Imani and Ashley, went driving and they were drunk. They weren’t paying attention to where they were going or what they were doing.

Then it happened . . . a big truck was driving by and the girls weren’t paying attention. The truck driver noticed the girls were going too fast and he warned the girls to slow the car down. The girls continued to play around and then before they even noticed it, their car crashed into the truck and BOOM!! Their car crashed into a ditch and it got destroyed. The girls got injured badly. Fire trucks, ambulances, and police cars were on the scene. The girls were unconscious and they were taken to separate hospitals.

When they got to the hospital, Victoria fell into a deep coma and she was unaware of what was going on. Her mother was sitting on her bedside and she started to sob. Her mother was sobbing uncontrollably because she was unable to be in Victoria’s life because she was still recovering from paralysis. While Victoria was in her coma she was in a white empty space, she didn’t know where she was or what to do. Victoria started running everywhere and began to freak out because the space was endless. She noticed a lady standing in the empty area, so she walked over to the lady to ask for help. The lady had a cloak on and she had her back turned against Victoria.

Victoria asked, “Who are you?”

The lady turned around and said, “I’m you.”

Victoria seemed confused and said, “What do you mean, you’re me?”

The lady pulled down her hoodie and said, “I’m you from the future.”

Victoria was in shock and she asked her future self what was going on.

Victoria’s future self said, “You were drinking and driving with Imani and Ashley and the three of you guys crashed into a truck.”

Victoria started to freak out again and asked the lady, “Where am I, and where is Imani and Ashley?”

Future Victoria said, “You are in the hospital in a deep coma. Ashley is recovering, but Imani didn’t make it.”

Victoria started to break down into tears. Future Victoria told Victoria to pull herself together and follow her.

“Where are we going?” Victoria asked as tears ran down her cheeks. Future Victoria walked towards an elevator and pressed the button. Victoria started to get aggravated and she said, “What the heck is going on and what is happening to me!?”

Future Victoria walked Victoria into the elevator and made her

look out the window. Future Victoria showed Victoria her mom sobbing right next to her hospital bed. Victoria started to sob again because she hated that her mom had to see her connected to all those machines. Victoria begged her future self to put her back in her body but future Victoria wasn’t done with Victoria. Future Victoria pressed another button and the elevator started shaking uncontrollably and Victoria fell unconscious again. Victoria woke up again and asked her future self what was going on.

Future Victoria said, “We traveled 20 years into the future!” Victoria was confused because she didn’t think time traveling was possible. Victoria and her future self walked out of the elevator and looked around. Victoria saw her older self sitting in a dark alley with a big box. She saw herself cold, hungry, and depressed.

Victoria asked, “What is happening to me and why do I look like that?” Future Victoria explained to Victoria that she made a lot of poor decisions growing up and these were the consequences that she faced. Her future self was homeless and people would always rob her for her money and steal from her. Victoria realized why she is in a coma and why she traveled into the future. If Victoria continued to make the choices that she was, then it’s not going to be good for her. Victoria once again begged her future self to send her back to the past so she could turn her life around. Victoria blacked out once again, just to wake up in a bedroom with her mother by her side.

Her mom said, ‘Victoria, I’m so sorry this happened to you. I’m so sorry that I wasn’t present in your life.” Her mother hugged her tightly and it was a heartwarming moment between them. Victoria and her mother had a very serious talk about the choices she had made and how Victoria needs to stop making poor choices or she will find herself in serious trouble. Victoria decided it was time to go back to school and she began to stay on top of her work and she stopped hanging out with people who would be a bad influence on her. Victoria wanted to major in business. So, she applied to colleges that focused on business. She started to become very responsible and placed in the top ten in the college honor roll. She graduated from college with a business degree and she became very successful in life. She even opened up her own business where she can help people that really need it. She eventually got married and had three kids. She lived a happy life and was very proud of herself.