» Hole After Hole

SKYE

age 11, NJ

Imagine you’re falling down a hole. It never stops. Some people feel like they are falling down a hole. And it never stops. Because they don’t believe in themself. Everyone sometimes doesn’t believe in themselves. Including me.

People try to help you but you don’t listen. So you keep on falling down a hole. But you know you need to listen. So one day you start listening. And you start believing yourself. You start climbing up the hole. Then, you see a mountain. You climb up the mountain. So now you are on top of the world.

Moral of the story: Always believe in yourself!

Hello, Skye,

Right away, I love that you invite the reader to imagine and then alert them to what is happening. It puts them right in the place of thought that you want them to experience and brings empathy to the table.

By putting the reader in the shoes of the subject in your poem, you’re directly allowing them the perspective to try to relate to others. This connection is aimed at the heart, thought by the mind, and sensed by the body. I believe it allows the perspective of what the power of belief can do. The lesson of knowing that you need to listen. You get their attention with your direction. This is strong work, my lady.

Well done, Skye. —Paula Goodman (#PaulaG), columnist, author, word jedi poetess, Ontario, Canada