Develop and Structure Ideas Effectively in Creative Writing Achievement
Achievement with Merit
Achievement with Excellence
I was three years old when I wrote my first poem I don’t remember it, only Dream geese, dark avian formation, over silent black water plip of pale pebble dropping disturbance into the still lake, ripples rolling outwards – like arpeggio, palaeo, all children know
I was nine years old when I won my first writing competition Expression, examination congratulations! We have decided your thoughts are beautiful, here is 80 bucks in vouchers, I wrote about freedom Liquid night, jellyfish flight, warm yet shiver beneath bloodless sun
Now within my stupid carvernous head the wet skin weight of
EGO curls like a cat, brittle-boned, but still I have so much to give, my rabbit thoughts are not beautiful? they are creature vs criteria, they have bloody matted fur, they fight and hide and multiply – hunger for that mind–heart coordination I have too much to give, a roaring blue tide of root and seed, torn and healed, ghosts and gorging greed, my! canine candid and my tentacle devotion, my bearded dragon bluff, because I’m still learning to process the bitter taste of no, to digest the daily dish of broccoli love, I am mud-creature trying to climb! life’s lonely ebb-and-flow eroding thebank below my dirty paws, my voracious velociraptor of gnawing regrets clothes left upon the floor and empathy untamed, I I was sixteen when I learnt about structure
— Shima Jack, Logan Park High School
