Write of Passage Essayist: Reyhan Title of Essay: Through Time
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Does the essayist show an understanding of the fundamentals? Please use the space provided below to draft your evidence for your Criteria A Score.
Level Is the essay completed on time? Does it Level meet the word limit? Does the essayist use transitions? Do the introduction and conclusion provide clear insight into the purpose of the essay? Does the student complete all class/homework associated with this task (blogging/ involvement in class discussion).
Has the essay been proofread? Do you make interesting word choices for this essay?
The student does not reach a standard described by any of the descriptors below. The essayist only uses one fundamental in the essay. The essayist uses at least three fundamentals. The writer is able to appropriately identify SPECIFIC lines from the essay which showcase the fundamentals. in the self evaluation. The essayist uses at least four fundamentals. The writer is able to appropriately identify SPECIFIC lines from the essay which showcase the fundamentals. in the self evaluation. The essayist uses five fundamentals. The writer is able to appropriately identify SPECIFIC lines from the essay which showcase the fundamentals. in the self evaluation. ALL SIX FUNDAMENTALS ARE USED! The essayist is able to explain why the fundamental DROVE the essay to succeed.
0 1-2
The student does not reach a standard described by any of the descriptors below. The essay is poorly organized. Ideas do not transition easily
0 1-2
The student does not reach a standard described by any of the descriptors below. The student needs more practice revising his/her written work, there are more than four mistakes in the essay (spelling/grammar) There are no more than two mistakes made in the essay
3-4
There is a clear introduction and conclusion. Some of the blog work is completely with pride
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There is a clear introduction and conclusion. Most of the blog work is completely with pride THE WORD LIMIT is met.
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There is a clear introduction and conclusion. ALL of the blog work is completely with pride THE WORD LIMIT is met.
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9-10
Every paragraph transitions. The introductory HOOK is unique and appropriate. The conclusion has that ‘so what’ factor. All classwork is completed with great pride. THE WORD LIMIT is met.
9-10 It is clear that this essay has been proofread more than once. There are no mistakes in grammar and spelling. The essayist is able to make note of at least five interesting vocabulary words used in this essay.
There are no more than two mistakes made in the essay. It is obvious that the essayist has taken care to select interesting vocabulary words with which to entice the reader. No more than ONE mistake made in the essay. It is obvious that the essayist has taken care to select interesting vocabulary words with which to entice the reader.
Evidence/Explanation of how I show that I know how to properly utilize the FUNDAMENTALS: 1. Write for a purpose. Inform, entertain, reflect, analyze. Write to do…something. The essay that I’ve written has more than one purpose. First, to create an open mindedness in my readers that Time isn’t something that’s real and that it’s just there to keep us into the logic that we can accept. Secondly it’s meant to entertain the readers by showing that something like time isn’t what we think it is. It’s more than that and somehow less than what we know. The essay also allows the readers to think and reflect, whether or not they’re seeing things the way they should and that everything is not what it seems.
2. Be a judge. Have opinions in your writing. An essay should be a window into your thinking. The essay is written in first person, showing that the essay is based on my perspective, but I also included theoretical examples from sources like NASA. In paragraph 5, I made a wrap up of the facts and information in the previous paragraphs in the form of my opinion and my explanation. It’s meant to show my thought about what I think after knowing the truth about time and what it’s really there for.
3. Extend. How do the ideas in your essay relate to others? How do you know? The idea of the essay is to open the minds of the readers into noticing that not everything is as it seems. The idea of time as a hoax is the ground zero of the things in life that may not function as we thought it would. The essay relates to the unexpectedness of life, like how I managed to put in the ending paragraph that we are living across time itself. That concept is not what people usually accept, but after reading the essay, the idea of things not being what it seems should let people be open minded to that idea.
4. Be insightful, ask why, and inspire your reader to ask why too. I have some rhetorical questions in the essay. Guiding the readers into questioning their ‘definitions’ and beliefs of what time is. I placed some ‘why?’ questions for them to inquire before reading further into the essay. That way, after the think, they can include my logic and explanation into their thinking, further emphasis on the essay argument. It’s good for the readers to question as it allows them to be curious and want to know more of the topic.
5. Tackle GIANT questions. Even if you don’t knock them down, the attempt will be something worth reading. The essay tackles the giant question of what is time. It’s not something that we commonly ask in normal routine, yet it’s something that we live with everyday. The essay is trying to open the minds of its readers that time is just something that’s made up and it’s not as robust as we think it is. It’s trying to open the minds of the the readers of the world that they may not have seen. As it’s about something that we live with everyday, I believe it’s really worth reading.
6. Take an honest view on what you value. If you are not presenting any values in your writing, you need to revise. The value of the essay is everything is not what it seems and that there’s a different way to look at something. This can be found in the last paragraph where I stated that things aren’t the way it always is. It’s about looking at the world from a different view and not from what we’ve been told. That we should start looking through the world from a different view point.