The Cost of Service Stephanie Richardson
I made some edits to make the article sound more personal and less like a research paper. I’m assuming that this article is to try to persuade readers to do this (or at least plant the idea in their head). If it is purely informative, then you may want to disregard some of my comments Humanitarian aid service trips are a wonderful way for volunteers to delve into meaningful travel, experience the world, learn about a different culture, and engage in
Cameron 10/7/12 12:04 PM Comment: I might try to change this intro sentence to be more of a hook (a story or situation perhaps). It’s a good intro, but it sounds a bit more like an essay for school than a magazine article
worthwhile causes. On these trips, volunteers have opportunities to go to foreign countries and work building homes, serving in medical clinics, working in orphanages, teaching English, and a variety of other projects. They come to find that what they gain from the experience of humanitarian service far outweighs what they spend financially for these trips. However, these trips can be quite costly. Just how much do these worthwhile trips cost? Though it is difficult to give an exact sum due to the variety of programs, countries, and trips one can take, this article attempts to give readers an idea of what they can expect to spend financially on a humanitarian trip, what is included in the program fees and tips on how to find a program that fits your
Cameron 10/7/12 12:04 PM Comment: This sounds sort of like a research paper thesis statement
financial budget. Nearly all humanitarian foundations that organize volunteer trips have a set of required fees. These fees can vary greatly depending on the location and duration of the trip, as well as the
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foundation that organizes the trip. Generally, these fees include everything that participants need
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to stay in the country: lodging, meals, work materials, and necessary transportation within the
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country. Some programs may include health insurance or language classes. By using the
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facilities and eating the food the program arranges, volunteers often spend less money travelling with a service program than they would spend had they gone to the country on their own.
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