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Hi David - we read your play sample play of Borstal Boys on Wednesday. The general consensus was that there is a potentially effective piece here. If you are still interested in developing a short scene then we’d like you to focus on the scene in which the police officer calls round to Mum and the boys. In that scene show the tension between Mum and the boys, the police officer and the boys and try to indicate why mum left london and how she is coping on her own. Just stick to the four characters in the one location [the living-room for example] and don’t be tempted to include another scene or more characters. You can include some of the other events via their conversation. We would love to see how you develop this - please pop along to our next meeting on the 20th June at 7.30 in the studio. This would make a smashing 5 minute piece. Hope this helps.