Sentiment By: David Foy
Sentiment By: David Foy
Table of Contents Authors Note--------------------------------------------------------------------------#1 Trust————————————————————————————#2 “I know I’m not the only one” Introduction——————————————— —————————————#3 An Encyclopedia of Me Sad Ending—————————————————— ——————————#4 Is it Worth it or Not? Introduction——————————————————— —————————#5 Moving On———————————————————————————— #6 Emotion and Motivation——————————————————————— —————#7 - #8 Love Hurts———————————————————————————— #9 The Pain that accompanies Loosing—————————————————— ——————————#10 Works Cited----------------------------------------------------------------------------------#11
Authors Note Heartbreak, we all deal with it at least once in our lifetime, and that is why it is the theme of this Zine. Why did I choose this you may be asking yourself? Well I wanted to have a theme that everyone could relate to on a much deeper level. I know I’ve had my fair share of heartbreaks in the past and I have no doubt in my mind that I will experience a few more before I find the person who is right for me. Selecting these eight pieces of writing was one of the hardest tasks I have had all year. I had to dig for them; I think I looked in every ones Google doc’s folders at least twice. It wasn’t so much focusing on the structure of the paragraphs, but looking deeper into the content of the writing. One of the greatest challenges I have had to face since I started writing is “writers block”. It was not till this year that writing became easier for me. I learned not to think too much about the details when writing, focus on getting the content out onto the page first then circle back and make the edits. I believe I have found my “Voice” as a writer.
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Trust, trust is the most important part of this process. If my friends didn't trust me to keep their problems between them and I they wouldn't tell me anything. I've been told that I'm a trustworthy person which is great and all but I prefer to let my actions speak for me instead of having someone tell me. Don't get me wrong though trust is extremely hard to earn depending on the person. Earning trust is like losing weight. You know you’re losing the pounds if your diet is up to par and you are exercising regularly, but in the back of your mind you know it's going to take a lot of time to get to your desired weight. Earning someone’s trust is similar in the way that you know that when you just make a new friend, a week after they became your friend they're not going to come to you in tears and pour their heart out to you when they have a serious problem, they're going to go to some other friend that they have known longer and who knows them better, which is totally fine. Losing weight and earning someone's trust are both very slow processes, but they are achievable with time. If you put in the work the end product will be worth it. Explanation: Trust is possibly one if not the hardest traits to deal with in any relationship. I chose this paragraph because it illustrates through an analogy that is completely unrelated to the topic, but some how works well in describing the process that trust is most definitely earned not given. I usually hate being repetitive and I try to avoid it on a regular basis, however this paragraph is different. You may notice while reading how many times I use the word trust. The repetition worked for this particular topic. 2 Â
"But when you call me baby I know I'm not the only one" most of you have probably heard of Sam Smith. He is one of the most popular, and newly emerged music artists in the year 2014. His brand new album "In the Lonely Hour" contains music that comes straight from his heart and enters through our ears and eventually makes it way into our hearts. He is most popular for the song "Stay with me" which is currently number twenty-seven on the iTunes top one hundred chart. Personally I love the whole album, mostly because I can relate to some of the songs. However, for me there is one that is above all others and that is "I know I'm not the only one". Explanation: An introduction in my opinion is without a doubt the hardest part in writing any paper. When we write introductions what we’re trying to do is grab our readers attention. The hook sentence for this paragraph is a quote from Sam Smith’s “I know I’m not the only one”. This stolen piece from the song instantly adds depth to the paper. As the paragraph progresses each sentence directs us toward the clearly stated thesis. The paragraph does what it is meant to do and sets the tone for the paper. 3
As soon as the music stopped I knew it was all over. The clock read 9:00 p.m and my time had come. I knew from that point on my life would never be the same, I am leaving a family that I have grown so accustomed to over the years. Tears of sadness ran down their faces, as they came to give me one last hug, I told them all I loved them. For some this is the last I am ever going to see of them, for others are accompanying me into this next chapter of my life, but for the ones I'm closest with I'm leaving behind. I feel peace in knowing I am moving on to bigger and better things, but also despair for the relationships I am leaving behind. Explanation: Evoking emotion through writing is not the easiest thing to do. It’s actually very difficult. I feel this paragraph had a great balance between descriptive, narrative, and reflective forms of writing. The different forms of writing are used at the correct times in the paragraph, and they match the tone and purpose of what is being conveyed.
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At one point in our lives we have all experienced the absolutely dreadful costs and drama of being in a romantic relationship with another person right? I'll be fair though, there were some good times to. However, if you really look back at the experiences you have had in your past relationships or even look at the one you're in right now (if you actually are in one) take a moment and ask yourself are or did the times when you were happy with each other outweigh the moments when you found yourself depressed or upset at one another? Don't get me wrong here I'm not trying to make you think your relationships aren't working out and that love is overrated. No! Of course not I would love to be in a happy successful relationship, being single is fun and all but you tend to get lonely, then depressed, then you mostly want to eat. However, I try to be as realistic and honest with myself as possible about the situation. I take a look back at all my past relationships, all the good times and all the not so good times. Finally, I ask myself that one essential question that most of us have probably at one time or another asked ourselves when making the transition from single mode back into relationship mode and that is "Is this really worth it?� Explanation: I chose this paragraph because it is artfully written. I think it is straightforward and the audience can relate to it in one way or another. There is little to no repetition, and the thesis is clearly stated. Altogether this is one of the better paragraphs I have written.
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Know that tomorrow is a new day and you'll always have people who love you around. When the time comes to move on, don't be afraid to try it, don't be scared of getting hurt again. Trust the boy and see how happy you could be with him. With the other boy that broke up with you, realize that it's his lost because you lost someone who didn't love you, but he lost someone who really loved him. Look back and see how much you cared about him and then realize he was the wrong one, so just imagine how much you can love the right person. But then again were young and were dumb, love is a big deal, we think life ends when small things happen but really something good comes out of something bad. -Written by Madison Collier Explanation: Honestly, this is not the most brilliantly written paragraph. There are minor grammatical errors and small changes that Madi could have made to improve her sentence structure. However, all this being said this is one of the better pieces of writing I viewed. I chose this paragraph because when I read it, I am able to relate to it on a personal note. It’s as if she is taking her own experiences and sort of coaching us through the aftermath of a break-up, and helping us realize that life goes on. The paragraph is some what clouded by certain cosmetic mistakes, but I believe when reading this passage the content shines through. Â
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Fast forward a couple years is when I met her, I was so infatuated by her everything. I was young, still naive, still happy, but I was motivated to get her attention. It was another motivation, it was a distraction from my motivation for school. It got to the point where I couldn't concentrate on school. I worked hard for her attention. I craved her attention. One day, it all payed off. All my trials and errors, trying to get her to look my way, it all payed off. She finally became my girlfriend, I was happy, but was it worth it? I finally got the girl I was crushing on but she didn't see me in the same light that I saw her. We fought, we disagreed on a lot of things, I overcame obstacles and trials just to keep her. In result, my grades fell, I picked up a habit of procrastinating or just not turning in my homework. My bright future that I was so proud of began to turn into an embarrassing dim light. I took my life down this path and I felt like there was no turning back. Junior year and I'm done, I'm done with all these problems that were detrimental to my mental health. I was happy again, not as naive as I used to be, but happy again, and that's what counted right? My grades started to see an increase in a positive direction. My friends were what mattered, they were my emotional support. My motivation started to come back, I started to want to come to school again, I wanted to try in school. That dim light that I had my middle school year starting to change to that of a flashlight. I remembered why I was going to school, it wasn't to see the "girl of my dreams", it was to become successful in life and to enjoy it to the fullest. -Written by Jared Martinez Explanation: We all are probably aware that a relationship is a distraction, especially when it is a young relationship. This passage clearly illustrates the dangers and risks you take when entering into a relationship. Organization was definitely an important thing that Jared focused on while writing this. The extremes came first and as I continued to read the moderation came toward the end. When I say extremes I mean the point of his whole paper is displayed in his first sentence. This excerpt is artfully written, and it is obvious great thought went into writing it. 8 Â Â
Love hurts, and that is not just a saying for the broken hearted. Heartbreak is a very strange distress. It is exquisitely painful, and yet we cannot find an injury on our body. New research finds that when you reminisce about the one that got away, the brain actually triggers sensations that you also feel in times of "real" physical pain, making heartbreak truly, physically painful to add to the emotional distress it sometimes causes. Heartbreak is like one big emotional pain but it also seems to spark off hundreds of other emotions. We hate the feeling of heartbreak, and yet we find ourselves compelled to go over and over memories, ideas or fantasies which make the feeling worse. -Written by Sy Kraft, B.A Explanation: This is an extremely well written passage. It gets right to the point with out a lot of excess and added things that are not needed. There is an absence repetition. Each sentence is unique and different from the one before it. Everything stated seem to be accurate facts, and this has obviously been read and fact checked by various smart people.
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"We of course equate the pain of loss to the intensity of the love, but that is not what is behind the pain. The more you love and feel loved, the greater the increase of your sense of purpose because when you do something for just anyone and they do not appreciate it; your sense of purpose is not completely satisfied. It requires seeing who you are helping, and their appreciation to make it complete." -Written by David Samuel. Explanation: I chose this quote because I find the way this man thinks and looks at things is intriguing. There are several “trust me” statements that are used in creative and artistic ways. He really made me think while I was reading this. We experience these things in our everyday lives, but never stop to think about it. He basically pointed out something that is so obvious and right in front of me, but I would have never even knew it was there if it wasn’t for this.
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