Revisel Using Descriptive Words One thing the writer could have done better was to use descriptive words. These words can help paint a colorful picture of the events that the writer is
describing. Here is how a sentence from the Student Model could be improved usi ng descri ptive words.
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A. Revise these sentences by using descriptive words. Use the Word Bank
to help you.
1. Litter patrol was work, but it was rewarding work.
2. The day began when I put a soda can into the bag.
3.
Next I pulled a plastic bag from a shrub.
4. I turned
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for page 22; Be sure to descriptive words. Do your writing on another sheet of paper. Revise the autobiographical narrative you wrote
use
Writer's Companion'. UNIT
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