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The paragraph below is the first draft that Helena wrote; The paragraph contains mistakes. Read the paragraph to answer questions 1-3. Going Door to Door (1) I was nervous. (2) I was collecting donations for the school library. (3) MV father and I had woken up at sunrise

to get an early start. (4) lt was the first house of the day. (5) | lightly rapped my knuckles on the door. (6) I listened for a sign of life behind the door, but I heard nothing. (7) I turned to look at my father, who was watching from the sidewalk. (8) | shrugged as if to ask, "How will I collect anything if no one is home?" (9) He made a knocking motion with his hand. (10) I knocked harder this time and turned again to show that no one was home. (11) Suddenly a loud creak startled me. (12)An elderly man was standing at the door. (13) Words tumbled out of my mouth. (1a)The next thing I knew, I was holding the first donation of the day!

1. Which sentence below should be added after sentence (1)to provide the reader with more descriptive words?

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2. Which sentence below should be added to the beginning of the paragraph to make a stronger lead?

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with the house on the corner of my street.

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The library needed to raise extra money for a new computer.

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The writer wants to add the following sentence to the story:

I nearly jumped off the porch! Where should this be added to provide more vivid details?

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