AP Day 1: Egg Stage Original:
Typed: He was my long trip. He took me everywhere, bought me everything. There was nothing that was going to hurt me. No one that could take me from him. Which is why when I was lonely, sad, hurt, at my ultime low I stuck to the trip. But other time, I would think that there was nothing better than to be with him, he was my everything, my love, he was my ride to the unknown, through the high and the lows. But for him, nothing was certain and I was very okay with that because I knew that without him, I wouldn't have this journey.
1. Describe where you were when you started writing this piece & what was on your mind? During the time of this piece I was having a Lana Del Rey moment. I think you can see her influence on my piece. Her music is very dark, old school romance, and tragic. I always imagine a character in her music and I think I added some stuff to that character and put her in this piece. 2. What kind of sentences did you use? Are there other patterns you notice? I use a lot of simple sentences, some are incomplete but I still end the sentence with a incomplete thought. You can also see that in this piece of writing I use the word “but” to begin a lot of my sentences. A pattern I notice is that I use past tense “he was my”, and I also use present tense “I was very okay with that”. 3. What themes do you notice in this piece? The themes I notice in this piece is being happy and content with unhappiness. I have never experienced this but I know it’s something other people experience and I think my piece speaks to that. I also notice that my piece touches base on abusive relationships which is a conversation we're having a lot in today’s world. 4. What were your intentions for this piece? Where do you see this piece going? My intentions of this piece was to just write about a character that might be feeling that dark, old school romance, and tragic Lana sings about. It was also a free writing prompt which is why I wrote about a journey because while writing I could have taken any direction. I see this piece becoming a short story that conveys a strong emotion, and an emotion that leaves you uncomfortable, but it’s so alluring that you can’t stop thinking about it.
AP Day 2: Caterpillar Stage What does my short story need? Today I allow my caterpillar explore the garden. My theme is pretty much set but I want to add a few things so that the theme is unmistakable. I would also like to add vivid imagery using metaphors and other phrases. Before He was my long trip. He took me everywhere, bought me everything. There was nothing that was going to hurt me. No one that could take me from him. Which is why when I was lonely, sad, hurt, at my ultime low I stuck to the trip. But other time, I would think that there was nothing better than to be with him, he was my everything, my love, he was my ride to the unknown, through the high and the lows. But for him, nothing was certain and I was very okay with that because I knew that without him, I wouldn't have this journey. After He was my long trip. He took me everywhere, bought me everything. There was nothing that was going to hurt me. No one that could take me from him. Which is why when I was lonely, sad, hurt, at my ultime low I stuck to the trip. I truly believe that there was nothing better than to be with him. He was my everything, my love, he was my ride to the unknown, through the high and through the lows. Oh the low times. When the physical pain was excruciating, and my body ached.
But I had a simple solution. I would just turn off. Turn off my mind, my thoughts, and my emotions. I allowed him to take control, take control of the journey. He would choose the destination, and I would be there. I would turn, speed up, slow down, it was all in his hands. Because if I didn’t turn, speed up, or slow down I would burn. But then there would be days when I turned, speed up, or slowed down that I would be worshipped. Feel a love like no other. Nothing was certain with him though. I would never know if I would get burned or worshipped and I was very okay with that because I knew that if I wasn’t, I would be on the road. All alone, scared, with no journey. Oh how I knew that without him, I wouldn’t have this journey.
AP Day 3: Chrysalis Stage My partner who looked over my work, happened to be my best friend. We both have the same taste in poems and music so she gave me really good feedback that can add to the theme. My partner VD did some grammar checks, and fixed some phrases I was saying wrong. She left me a phrase I can say “I’m obsessed with the mess” which I love so I will for sure add that to the final product.
AP Day 4: Butterfly Stage Down below you will find the final piece of my writing. The words underlined are the things my partner suggested I add or change. I have also decided on a title for this piece which was inspired by the patterns my partner noticed. The Journey He was my long trip. He took me everywhere, bought me everything. There was nothing that was going to hurt me. No one that could take me from him. Which is why when I was lonely, sad, hurt, at my All time low I stuck to the trip. I truly believe that there was nothing better than to be with him. He was my everything, my love, he was my ride to the unknown, through the high and through the lows. Oh the low times. When the physical pain was excruciating, and my body ached. But I had a simple solution. I would just turn off. Turn off my mind, my thoughts, and my emotions. I allowed him to take control, take control of the journey. He would choose the destination, and I would be there. I would turn, speed up, slow down, it was all in his
hands. Because if I didn’t turn, sped up, or slowed down I would burn. But then there would be days when I turned, s ped up, or slowed down that I would be worshipped. Feel a love like no other. Nothing was certain with him though. I would never know if I would get burned or worshipped and I was very okay with that. I’m obsessed with the mess because I knew that if I wasn’t, I would be on the road. All alone, scared, with no journey. Oh how I knew that without him, I wouldn’t have this journey.