The five–paragraph formula is a destructive formula that cuts the blood flow of creativity from students. As Campbell essentially argues in his paper, "Beyond the Five–Paragraph Essay." Campbell's main idea that he reiterates and stresses over and over again; is that the five–paragraph formula doesn't properly allow students to express themselves with their own unique voice through writing. The alternatives to the five–paragraph formula are better suited for students as they allow students to use as he stated, "their authentic, authoritative voices."
Campbell sets the scene by showing how some teachers defended the five–paragraph formula when he was doing a presentation on common core standards. Campbell's main reason for writing the...show more content...
Campbell did a great job in laying out and showing the main reasons and arguments against the five–paragraph formula. However, in terms of his essay, he neglected to mention a few things that would've further enriched his essay. One of the critical aspects he neglected to mention that I would add would be mainly statistics instead of heavily relying on anecdotal evidence. For example, on page 62 as he is discussing the key issues with the formula he stated, "it doesn't ensure success on standardized tests–or in college." I would've added a statistics further enriching the say by getting his point across and having a somewhat of a shock factor. A shock factor would've really made his point stand out and would not just have the essay rely on anecdotal evidence but a mixture of scientific and anecdotal evidence. Moreover, I would've also included a more sound concluding paragraph. I felt like the last paragraph left a somewhat sour taste in my mouth; I would've added now that they are able to write better essays their writing has drastically improved and really highlighted the overall difference in quality between using different formulas. I believe that would've enriched the essay and left a more sound concluding paragraph with a much sweeter taste.
From the get–go Campbell's voice was established and had a booming presence throughout. He also had his ideas shine through and not get muffled when referencing other people's works; truly elevating and
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Campbell's Five-Viewpoints
Formula One Racing Essay
Formula One Racing
Formula one is the fastest racing car in the world. It is called the greatest car show in the world. Formula one has a great influence on the people. Millions of people sit in front of the TV set or around the circuit and watch the race. The drivers are often called kings of speed and they show their ability to drive fast every second week of the season.
People wondered about this racing many years ago. The cars were very different from today's formula ones. The question of safety and also the atmosphere of racing was different. It was a risk to drive so fast and a lot of tragic accidents happened. Also the rules have been changed since the first race was held. The rules are very strict today for safety. According...show more content...
The safety car appears when an accident happens. Drivers must drive behind the safety car slowly and they cannot overtake each other. When someone doesn't obey the rules he has a penalty. It means that he must take a few seconds pit stop.
When a F1 team and its drivers want to succeed, they must have a good team strategy. It means that the team management must plan everything important. They decide whether to use hard or soft tires, how many pit stops the driver should have, how much fuel to take, which driver is number one on the team... Today's top teams have very good strategies which are different in every race. The best teams are McLaren, Ferrari, Jordan, Williams F1 and than less successful Stewart, Arrows, Minardi... The drivers of McLaren are Mika Hakkinen and David Coulthard. The strategy in this team is very interesting. The drivers can compete between each other even when Mika is number one! So David can take points which can make Mika winner of the season. The drivers of Ferrari are Michael Schumacher and Eddie Irvine. And the strategy? No.2 has to support No.1. My favorite team is Jordan Mugen Honda whose drivers are H.H.Frentzen and Damon Hill.
The team's strategy must adapt to each Grand Prix. There are several Grand Prix with different circuits during the season. For instance GP of Germany, Italy, Monaco, Canada, Europe, Hungary, Austria and Japan. The current season in 1999 has a special new Grand Prix of Malaysia which was held last week. First was
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Paragraph explanation with specific examples: Passwords are important remember to always keep them private to you and your parents. When you get a password keep it to yourself because if you tell a friend that friend might not be your friend tomorrow or next week and then try to get you in trouble on the site that you are using. When you have a password for a while it is important to change it up. Never make your password easy make it hard for someone to guess it but good enough to where you can remember it. Always make sure your parents or guardian knows your password because they are in charge of how you can use the site you are using
Paragraph explanation with specific examples: When you post something make sure you are thinking about who can see it. What you write in a chat room or email may affect you in the long run. Anything you do online is not always and completely private. If you send a...show more content...
Cell Phones are different than computers but you still should use the same safety rules. When have a phone number it is good to have people contact you when they need to. But also having a phone number means you have to be careful who you give it to because if you give it to someone they can give it to a stranger and that can be bad for you. When having a cellphone it knows where you are at all times because it has your location. Most kids don't think about how dangerous it is to have a cellphone.
Paragraph explanation with specific examples: When you are getting cyberbullied one option is just to exit the social media site. If you just stay off the internet for a week or two it will be good for you. You spend a lot of your time on the internet go outside and play it is good for you. People have to live life in the real world and not just on the internet. When you log out from all the drama it feels great more people should try
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Baby Formula
Many parents choose to feed their infants breast milk, because it is more nutritious than formula. In some countries such as China, women have chosen to use formula instead of breast–milk, because they have to work. Recently a baby formula crisis has occurred on China's mainland. Baby Formula is made with a product called melamine, for an added boost in protein for infants. According to Crandall "A company called the Sanlu group was purchasing melamine laced milk used in its baby formula" (Crandall, Parnell, and Spillen. 2013 pg. 22). Hospitals and clinks have become overloaded with the hundreds of infants that became sick, and a few that have died from drinking the formula. Before the outbreak of this contamination into the formula, the
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Formulas Vs Calorimetry
Matter can take on different changes physically and chemically, for an example of a physical change is when water freezes into ice, there is no chemical change to the water but a physical change the ice is just water molecules made of hydrogen and oxygen packed tightly together. But, another physical change would be bending iron metal, the iron is still the same chemically whether it is made into I beams, or pressed into shapes to make the body of a car; the shape may change but it never changes chemically. In addition, a chemical change is the results in one or more substances that make up an entirely different composition from the original substances. The compounds and/ or elements at the start of the chemical reaction are rearranged into a new product of compounds or elements. Also a chemical reaction alters the composition of the original matter, different elements or compounds are present at the end of the chemical change. Although an example of a chemical reaction is the process of rusting, you start with Iron mixed with air and water you get a different compound. Along with chemical changes the Law of Conservation of Mass plays a part in it too. The Law of Conservation of Mass (or Matter)...show more content... The molecule formula is the actual number of atoms in that molecule. The molecular formula tells you the number of atoms of each element that is present in the chemical reaction. Also, the molecular formula is an expression of the number and type of atoms that are present in a single molecule of a substance. Also, the empirical formula tells you what people have observed and is also the ratio of the elements in a molecular formula. Furthermore if you can divide all the number in a molecular formula by the some value to simplify them, then the empirical or simple formula will be different from the molecular formula. In some chemical formulas you deal with Alkaline Earth
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