30th July 2015 Space 4 Chelsea School Persuasive Writing
22 July 2015 WALT Persuade Mr B to buy our underwater home
Surface Features Title Descriptive adjectives Correct Punctuation and Spelling Correctly Paragraphed Easy to read font
Deeper Features Has to ‘hook’ the reader in It has to be ‘professional’ It has to be ‘believable’ Omit all the negative without lying Be Positive Sound ‘upbeat’
Publishing Digitally published only An appropriate image (a picture is worth a thousand words)
20 July 2015 WALT: Persuade Mr B to buy our underwater home
Under Water House It is a lavish under water house with its own arcade, four bedrooms, kitchen, dining room, living room, bathroom and three toilets. This stunning home comes with vast amounts of abilities some of which are: Auto pilot and voice control for driving. It comes with wheels with super thick rubber so it is hard to pop. But if they somehow do pop it has a propeller on the back so you can take it anywhere you want. In case you get cabin fever it comes with a complete scuba diving kit. Purchase it now before it’s too late. The auction is on the 4th of August 2015
By Aidan
24.7.15 WALT: Persuade Mr Bickford to buy my underwater home
Coral Cove! This is the right underwater house for you. The house is a light submarine that can travel up to 200km per hour. You are probably wondering how this house gets air. This amazing home has a tube that gets air supply for a whole year and it only takes two minutes. This under water house has five bedrooms plus a kitchen and a study. The three bathrooms all come with an ensuite. Whenever are shark or an enemy comes to close the submarine it goes into lockdown mode where everything turns into shark/enemy glass so nothing can hurt you. Do you like seahorses? Well every day for your ride to work the seahorses take you there in a flash. This stunning home won’t be available for long so hurry up and be part of the underwater experience! By Ashleigh
22 July 2015. Walt Persuade Mr Bickford to buy your underwater house
Braden’s Underwater Mansion Family special sixteen story house with heating everywhere you go. Look out from your submarine that comes with a private driver. The Submarine is called Big Boss 2.0. The house has a huge viewing window where you can see seals, sharks and fish at the Great Barrier Reef. The house comes with a helicopter called Hawk 2.0. There is a secret hatch next to the Helicopter to get to an Air force plane called Hercules. It’s definitely the most amazing house I’ve ever seen. An Elevator goes up all sixteen stories and plays music. This luxurious home has a one hundred car garage. The home comes with a Corvette Stingray powered by propeller. The house has a heated knife to kill fish instantly which float into the car and you can eat them straight away. The kids bedroom has two beds two TVs and two wardrobes. The parent’s bedroom has a couch, a big curved TV and a queen size bed. There are beautiful view from both bedrooms. You can see all kinds of sea creatures like turtles, sharks, Fish, seals and crabs. This mansion has a movie theatre complete with every movie ever made available for free download. Everywhere you go there will be the best solar heating in the world. If you go out and you want your house to be warm when you get home just set the temperature on your phone and it will automatically turn onto that specific degree.
23rd July 2015 WALT: Persuade someone to buy your underwater home.
Underwater House This underwater house is $100,000 and it’s a perfect underwater house. It has five spa pools and it has a dining room with eight seats. The bathroom has a swimming pool inside. There are eight beds in each bedroom. There is a fish machine that feeds your pet shark. It has a two goldfish and one dog barking at the three cats. There is a diver and a man with a boat. The man drives the boat and the diver goes into the water. You can come to the auction to buy it. Everyone says ‘Go Connie!’ By Connie
28/07/15 WALT Persuade Mr B to buy your underwater house
The Super Duper Awesome House! Once you buy this amazing stylish house you will wish to never let it go. It comes with your own beautiful dolphin transport with seats decorated with fantastic starfish and bubble glass to not let the water in. The dolphin has its own little water house. This house has a spa, two bathrooms and four bedrooms. Isn’t that what you're looking for? Quiet neighbours, nice view and if you would like to go for a walk you can just put on your own comfortable underwater costume with a little drink if you need one. You could have a walk to the dairy! It’s very close! What about if the sharks come? Don’t worry about that. Sharks avoid this neighbourhood because it’s got a protective bubble that only lets non-violent animals in. By Dasha
Date 24/7/15 Walt: Persuade Mr B to buy our underwater home
Under Water Fiesta This house has a perfect view of the surrounding marine life. It has a total of twenty four rooms and lots to keep the kiddies entertained. With a cinema, rugby field, racetrack and arcade there's something for everyone. Your house will be safe with a 24/7 guard shark that you can ride to school or work. This house comes with stock cars, pro stock cars, formula one cars, two submersibles, a formula three car, an escape pod and three buggies. For the farm boy you get a pig farm, cow farm, chicken farm and the latest in cheese farm technology. (All crops included). You're safe from sharks with Twenty Four inch Stainless steel walls. The house is fully insulated and warm in the winter. In case of emergency you get your own private hospital. The house comes with a batch of banana muffins and a banana cookbook. Auction 24th August. Reserve 2.5 Billion. Goes to the highest bidder. By David E
22nd July 2015 WALT: Persuade someone to buy our under water house.
The Lifetime Holiday STOP! If you are looking for an amazing underwater house with views of the Great barer Reef then this house is for you. A great family home with three bedrooms, two bathrooms with an onsweet, movie room, nerf room, family room, escape room and a full sized kitchen. This house is the best in the ocean and it also has a 20-20 sub pit. This sub has fold out magnetic floaters so this makes the sub go super-fast and it aloes it to go on land. This house has a special dome so you can see out but others can’t see in. This house has everything for kids like an arcade Indore trap room and a NERF arena. The previous owners struggled to move out.
For more details contact DavidS@my.chelsea.school.nz or phone 021 482 330 for more details.
27.7.15 WALT: Persuade Mr Bickford to Buy Your Underwater House
Grand Design Have you ever wanted to live in your favourite beach? Well, if you do then stop right now because this might be the home for you! This house is fully insulated in all of the rooms to keep you nice and cosy day or night. There is a total of three bedrooms in the house. The kitchen has two ovens (for no reason) a dishwasher and also comes with a fridge. The lounge comes with a 78 inch T.V. The dome at the top is a gravity chamber. In the chamber there is absolutely no gravity. Yep, that’s right, no gravity at all which means that you can float around watching lots of tropical fish. The house is made entirely out of shark and bullet proof glass. The house has a slide from the beach to the house. Auction starts on the 5th august at 1:30 pm.
By Emily
22 July 2015 WALT: Persuade someone to buy your underwater home.
Indestructible Underwater Jet If you are looking for an easy, modern but mobile house for expeditions and epic places to live, this jet house is for you. The Azure Drone is a stylish and tough underwater jet that doubles as a luxurious house! The sub has five rooms, a bedroom (left top wing), a study (right bottom wing), a kitchen plus pantry (left bottom wing), explore gup launcher (right top wing) and a cockpit in the front, all made from non-rusting steel and plexiglass made to withstand shark attacks and water pressure. The Azure Drone’s wings can fold together to fit into tight spaces. Air tanks supply enough air to last two months and marine life-friendly lights automatically switch on when the scene gets dark. This house is made to withstand extreme temperatures like -160 degrees Celsius. If needed, the Azure Drone can roll out to beaches with suction tyres located near the engine. A gup launcher is equipped with wings allowing it to fly and air for a week. This smart house is perfect for a family up to four and ideal for underwater transportation with a max speed of one hundred and fifty kilometres and is completely hydrodynamic. The Azure Drone is the sixth prototype of the UNDER DRONE series developed by a group of scientists at Otago University, preparing ahead for a disaster. This prototype is for sale after testing has finished on the 26th of July. Auctions on 30th July. Contact me on EmiL@my.chelsea.school.nz for a tour or call (09) 9080078 for more info.
23rd of July 2015 WALT: Persuade Mr B to buy our underwater house
This Underwater Home is just for you! This fantastic underwater home has an enormous living room with a great view of the Barrier Reef. It has an elevator with two comfy couches to take you to the land in an instant. It also has a giant garage with a submarine that has ten seats for people to sit on. This house is fully insulated and shark proof. Auctions on 8th August. Contact (09)36283728 for more info. By Ga-Yeon
29 July 2015 WALT Persuade Mr B to buy our underwater home
The Underwater Amazement! This amazing underwater home uses the latest submersible technology. Its owners wish they didn’t have to go to Mars but that makes it your chance to have an all-terrain travelling house that can even fly! It comes with a built-in teleport system, quintuple insulation and even an arcade complete with Pac-Man. It even has a fish tank that auto-feeds and autocleans. Need to relax, Take a dip in the spa. If you get bored of the marine life you can always take a flight or drive on land. It even has a camouflage system so you can get up close with the fish! The periscope and mini submarine both have an advantage that you can’t question! Complete with the luxury of two double bedrooms and two bathrooms complete with a shower! The work room is a sight to behold! Go to the observation deck for fish! In the lounge there is a 75 inch HD cable TV! The kitchen has the best oven ever with pizza and popcorn settings and a fridge with a built in butter heater! You will have fun with the automated farm that even makes bread and rice. For a private viewing or even just more information email me at matthew@my.chelsea.school.nz. Auction starts at $1.5 billion. By Matthew
23/7/15 WALT: Persuade someone to buy your underwater house
The Perfect House Looking for a luxurious house and you don’t like climbing stairs? Well look no further because this is the perfect house for you. It has a lift, an aqua car 2000 with a luxurious garage. Instead of freezing to death in the toilet you can feel the warmth as it has triple insulating. Not very good at swimming? Well this house also comes with a submarine that can go basically as fast as you want and it also has a heater that is one of the safest in the world. Want to go and collect some shells? Well the sub also comes with a claw. Like swimming? Well this house also comes with a WHOLE closet full of scuba diving gear. If you want to go somewhere with your house you just go to the garage and press a button and wheels pop out of the underside of your house and will start moving once you have said your location. If you have a puncture in your tyre well just press another button and an underwater motor 2000 will pop out so you can continue your journey. The owners loved this house but they decided that it was time to check out different houses.
For more details email NathanT@my.chelsea.school.nz
or phone 480
8966
7th July 2015 WALT Persuade Mr B to buy our under water home
UNDER WATER SPECIAL If you’re looking for a special house this home is for you. Its eight story’s high with a chopper on top. There is a Bugatti sub that can reach speeds of up to two hundred and fifty five kilometres per hour. The home comes complete with a great sized kitchen area. The master bedroom has a queen bed and a big wardrobe. There is a built in T.V with 3D speakers and a Playstation 4. The Dining room has an eleven seat table with beautiful, comfortable seats. The Living room comes with a white leather couch with seat warmer built in. It has a seventy inch T.V with ten inch 3D speakers and sound proof ear muffs and wireless connection computer right to the T.V. The home comes with a glass pool. There’s a shallow end and a deep end with four meters depth. The pool is fifteen meters long. A water slide completes the pool area. This amazing house comes with a look out room. This is one of the best features you have as you have the best view in town. The home is fully insulated by Green Stuff ™ and comes with a heat pump pack. For more information contact me at OliverC@my.chelsea.school.nz phone 0224823908 By Oliver
7 July 2015 WALT: persuade someone to buy your underwater home
Underwater Kitty House! Have you been looking and looking and looking but never find the right house? Well, come and see this underwater kitty house! This house travels around the ocean by its automatic moving legs. No children or adults are going to be sick for sure! Inside is going to already be filled with a huge tank with air inside. No confusing buttons that fill the whole room to control the kitty! Every day will be a- okay! Even the kids can control the machine! What about food? Yes I know, what about food? That will be under the kitten’s control. The cat will have a basket to scoop fish and seaweed. What? My daughter is allergic to seaweed! Ha ha ha! I was up to that part. Inside the house has a greenhouse, filled with yummy fruit and veggies to enjoy. This greenhouse will be on the top floor so it gets the most air. Speaking of the top floor, there's a viewing room! You lie down on your fluffy bouncy bed and look until you fall asleep (good place for those people who don’t fall asleep fast, in the morning you might find yourself drooling!) Don’t stop reading!
23rd June 2015 WALT: Persuade someone to buy your underwater house
Stylish Underwater Home If you are looking for a modern and affordable home you have come to the right place. This quadruple glazed bullet proof glass domed house is perfect for people that want a spectacular home at an extremely affordable price. This house has an amazing view of the Great Barrier Reef and all of the exotic species that happen to pass by. Having heat lamps, under floor heating and a gas fire in the lounge, will keep you snug as a bug in a rug. This gem has two bedrooms, a double king bedroom and a double king suite. The home comes complete with a vegetable garden, oxygenating room, dining room, kitchen and lounge suite. This amazing opportunity has a fishing room with a decompression zone and all the gear and fishing rods you could possibly need. It has a shark submarine with harpoon turrets and can reach speeds of up to two hundred kilometres per hour. There are three options when exiting the home. There is a glass elevator, an emergency escape pod or the shark sub I mentioned earlier. With harpoon turrets on each side of the house and immaculate views the owners are dismayed they had to move. Auction on 24th of August reserve price: ÂŁ200,500,000 email samd@my.chelsea.school.nz for more details. By Sam
20.7.15 WALT: Persuade someone to buy your underwater house.
Ravishing Reef Getaway This luxurious submarine has six amazing rooms and is quadruple insulated. It is made of high-strength glass and titanium. The bedroom has an extra bouncy chair in case you get bored with your work. The bedroom has a walk in wardrobe where you say what you're doing on that day and it picks out an outfit for you. In the bathroom the tap and bath are voice controlled. Simply say the temperature you want and it will do exactly that. There is a spectacular ‘watercopter’ in the garage ideal for travel and fun. Both the house/submarine can be put on autopilot that responds to your thoughts and takes you where you want to go. This amazing home also has a cinema with sixty seats. It contains every movie and auto updates when new ones become available. The kitchen is self-controlled and voice activated so the house cooks for you and the groceries get sub delivered by a man named Steve. The dining room has a pneumatic food delivery from the kitchen. This amazing house/submarine is run on a book that has all the secrets of the sea. Act now before this amazing opportunity passes you by. By Shana
Date: 23 July 2015 WALT: Persuade Mr Bickford to buy our underwater home
Reef living at its best! Located in the beautiful barrier reef (at the moment), this home has everything the underwater life has to offer. With water being turned into electricity, and pipes releasing oxygen, this family manor is perfectly liveable, and being fully insulated you can expect warm and cozy winters! Watch through the glass dome as the water changes colour to a beautiful yellow when the sun sets and rises. This home can now be monitored with the newly installed control room, giving you the option of adjusting the air pressure, the lights but also but just a touch of a button, you can zap your home into an entire new location! Forget all those people with flowers and bird baths in their back garden, you can stand out with your own personal coral reef! Step into a wonderland of swirling colours, though remember to wear your oxygen helmet and gear which is provided! Not only do you get your own coral reef, but watch as dolphins and other creatures of the deep come and go freely in your reef. This house is a combination of steel, metal and bullet proof glass, making you feel safe and sound. Inside a gigantic glass dome is the centre of the manor, acting as a wonderful living room. Connected to the dome is also three master bedrooms complete with their own personal bathrooms. A kitchen is also accessible through the dome. This house also has many other wonder rooms to explore! This home is a miracle come to life. Starting at the price of only one million be sure to attend the auction on the 17th of August! By Skye
21 July 2015 WALT: Persuade someone to buy our underwater house.
Modern Underwater Mansion! If you are looking for a stylish, modern, underwater smart house, then this is the house for you! Complete with matching built-in furniture and a waste powered submarine, this state-of-the-art house is fully insulated and designed to give you a wonderfully luxurious lifestyle. It’s a comfortable 300 square meter home with elegantly curving metallic walls and glass, strong enough to hold the pressure of the water outside. This smart house is built to keep all the warmth in no matter the temperature of the ocean. Located close to the Great Barrier Reef, the crystal lounge pods give an excellent view of the coral reef and sea life. This house includes: a glass elevator with mini lounge inside, three single bedrooms, two master bedrooms with ensuite bathrooms, a library, multiple viewing domes, pool and spa area, indoor garden and reserve plus control panel, where you can adjust the pressure or temperature of your entire house with the flick of a switch. Buy this house, and the world is your oyster. Email stinaellis@icloud.com to book a tour or phone 09 550 6410 for more details. By Stina
1 July 2015 WALT: Persuade Mr B to buy our underwater home
The Underwater Home Auction Here is a cool underwater house. It is big and has a priceless clock, TV and heater. The home has some other large modern furniture such as dinner tables, chairs, sofas and beds. There’s five bedrooms and a hot chimney plus plenty of yummy food. It has boats at the back of the house. There are lots of exits like a secret hole, an air hole and fire exits. There is warm colourful carpet on the floor and it has windows so you can see the beautiful view. The sun always shines at the underwater house, so it’s so warm and comfortable. It has many different sizes of bedrooms, as well as bathrooms and toilets. It has an underwater garden so you can plant veggies, colourful flowers and trees. It has the best security in the world. Security cameras are operating 24 hours and has electric gates at the front of the house and under the tunnel into the underwater home. There’s a spare room for flatmates to live in your house if you want to do that. There’s a private deck to rest on. Be quick, the underwater house will be gone soon!!!! By Tom
20th July WALT: Persuade Mr Bickford to buy our underwater house.
Tristan’s Underwater House This large house is right next to the beach, with a submarine that can go deeper into the dark parts of the ocean. This house is perfect for one person. It also comes with a water-spitter and an air collector. The water-spitter spits up water from the house when you open the door. The air collector is great when you need air. You can drive the submarine to get to your bedroom. The bedroom is perfect for pets because it has a special pet ramp and the beds are specifically designed for your pets. Don’t miss out! Sale ends August 23rd. By Tristan
Wednesday 1st July 2015 WALT: Persuade Mr Bickford to buy our under water home
Family Special Do you want a luxurious family home? Well this home is just for you. This is a welcoming home just for you. It comes fully insulated and also has a wonderful view of the Great Barrier Reef. It has everything to keep the kids going and also keep you comfortable with a four story house situated in a peaceful quiet area. The home has an underwater jet with a max speed of one hundred and ninety kilometres per hour. This home has a cinema that has seventy five seats that are extra bouncy just for the kids. This amazing home has four bedrooms, two lounges and fishing and diving gear so dad has time with the kids. There is beautiful lookout room for everyone to enjoy viewing the amazing fish. The owners would’ve loved to move with this beautiful home but it was too expensive. Highest bidder gets to live in this amazing home. Reserve: $560,000 Auction: 26th August 2015 By Tzion
30 July 2015 Walt: Persuade Mr Bickford to buy our house
The Underwater Home Did you ever want to live underwater and look at fish and relaxing coral? You can now, with this four room special underwater home with a view of marine life and coral. A speedy Submarine will get you anywhere in no time at all. The home is close to the city and made of steel that is shark proof and is see through. There is a Modern Kitchen with an oven and microwave with stove. The lounge comes with built in furniture, storage with ten shelves to hold all of your food and other things and master bedroom with lamps and curtains. Auctions is on Tomorrow. Bidding starts at two hundred thousand dollars. By KiYong
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